Now that you have discussed the poem, reread your first response about your relationship with a parent. Write how the situation in the poems that you’ve selected is similar to or different from your own life. (2-3 paragraphs) Refer to specific LINES from the poems.
You may also write about how the situation in the poems is similar to or different from the lives of the average teenager today.
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Poems
In the First Lesson by Phyllis McGinely, he refers to the fathers love and how the child may "climb, and they fear you'll fall". That is how my father feels bout me, he allows me to climb as high as I can reach, but he always is afraid I'll fall and get hurt. Yet, I know that "his love kindle[s] in the dark" even though in person he doesn't like to show it to me (Secret Heart). My mom on the other hand is very affectionate and loves to show her feelings of people. She is always expressing her love for my dad and us, whereas my dad doesn't, you just have to assume that's how he feels.
ReplyDeleteMy dad is like the father in The Secret Heart because he isn't really emotional. He keeps everything in side, but once in a while I will see how he is feeling on the inside. He shows this side of himself very rarely, but when he does it makes me remember that he does care about my sister and I even if he doesn't always show it to us. My mother is more like the woman in Mother to Son because she is always giving me advice on things to make life easier. She is wants me to succeed and to be the best that I can be, and she helps me to do this. She is caring and shows it all the time no matter what. She tries to be positive as much as possible and it rubs off on everyone around her.
ReplyDeleteThe First Lesson poem reminds me so much of my dad. The poem explains why men and fathers act the way they do, and that it’s not their fault, it is just who they are. The poem mentions how fathers fear, “romantic terrors” and are like “dragon seekers” protecting their daughters from danger. My dad protects me like no other. He doesn’t like the idea of a boyfriend because he doesn’t want me to get heart broken. It doesn’t help that his profession includes protecting society from harm, so all of that emphasis ends up on me as well. But my dad means well, and I know he’s protecting me for my benefit. I am his only girl, and it makes sense that he would never want any harm or stress for me. I can understand where men and dad’s, like mine, are coming from. Their little girls mean the world to them, and they won’t let anyone hurt them.
ReplyDeleteThe "Mother to Son" is closest to me and my mother's relationship, because she had it a lot harder than I did, "Life for me ain't been no crystal stair" yet she kept climbing, as the author's mother did. My mom doesn't want me to give up, she says all the time to keep going, and to think of the past as in the past, and "Don't you fall now-- For I'se still goin',honey, I'se still climbin'". The author's mom and mine both want us to keep moving, just keep going, and we will get to the top eventually. I can easily connect this poem to the relationship I have with my mom.
ReplyDeleteThe relationship I have with my dad is like the one mentioned in "First Lesson", where he tries to hard to protect me from the world, and is afraid of letting me go off to to my own things. My dad believes "change is a threat", where the change in me growing up from a little girl is shocking to him. My dad also had a hard childhood and life, so he knows that he can get through it, and whatever struggles I have are small in comparison, so I can overcome them ("Mother to Son"). His life has not been a "crystal stair", and he wants me to have a better experience, so he tries to protect me but also push me on to achieve as much as I can.
ReplyDeleteThe poem "First Lesson", can be easily related to the relationship that my dad and I share. My father always tries to protect me now, and to teach me lessons for when I "walk alone". My father, my "dragon-seeker", looks to protect me from all of the "romantic terrors" that I will come across through life. Although my father and I both have days where we want to leave each other alone, he is always there for me. My father and I both know that in less than a year and a half, I will branch out and go to a school that is farther away than I have ever been. We both are aware that we will not see each other every morning and every night when we go to sleep. But, the one thing that we both have to keep in mind is that I will not be gone forever. My father knows that I will branch out, meet new people and live somewhere new, but I will always come home. My father knows that I am his baby, his only daughter, and he is my only father. This is how the poem "First Lesson" can be easily related to the relationship that my father and I share.
ReplyDeleteThe poem by Evelyn Tooley Hunt called "Taught Me Purple" reminds me of my own relationship with my mother. My mom has taught me to stand up for myself and be independent, and yet "she never wore it." That is because my mom is always trying to do the things that are in my best interest, but does not do those things for herself. Having so many children, she knows much about "duty" and patience. With so much on her plate, my mom has never had much time to have pride in the job that she has done in bringing up me and my siblings, so in that way, she "could not teach me pride" either.
ReplyDelete"Those Winter Sundays" can be easily related to my dad. He works very hard, trying to get as much work done as possible, as he understands that he needs to work for the family. The father in the poem does this as well, as he puts himself through a schedule of hard work just so his family can live a good life. They both have "cracked hands that ached," as they both have jobs that have extensive ware on the body. Although they are similar in the sense of working, my dad differs from the man in the poem due to the fun that he has. The father in the poem sounds like somebody who is always working, never taking a minute off. My dad always finds small times out of the day to do something that he enjoys, keeping his mind level and happy. In addition, he gets thanks from others, as we all see the amount of work that he does for us. In the end, my dad is a lot like the dad in "Those Winter Sundays."
ReplyDeleteI can relate to the poem "My Papa's Waltz." Although I grew up in a loving household where my parents are not abusive, this poem still expresses how children have contradicting feelings towards their parents. I love my parents dearly but we most certainly have our ups and downs. I am sure almost every teenager has felt a bit of resentment toward one or both of their parents in their lifetime. Feelings can change in the blink of an eye and you may feel different one moment from the next. "You beat time on my head With a palm caked hard by dirt,Then waltzed me off to bed Still clinging to your shirt." This line demonstrated how a parent that makes mistakes will still always be loved by their child. It may be hard to forgive them at times but in the long run everything works out. This poem does not only define me and my feelings, it tells a story that most teenagers can relate to. Whether they have been in that exact situation or one of their own, teenagers and parents fight, and that is inevitable.
ReplyDeleteIn "Mother to Son" a mother is talking about how life hasn't been easy. She has worked hard in life and she has worked hard to get her son to where he is. She said "Don't you fall now" meaning that on the staircase of life, you don't want to fall back down to where you came which in this case could likely mean slavery. My parents are always telling me that I need to do my best. They say that if I do my best then I will succeed in life. They too want me to succeed and do better in life than they did.
ReplyDeleteIn "The Secret Heart" we see the secret love a father has towards his son. "It showed a look upon a face too tender for the day to trace". this shows that the father didn't show that much love during the day but at night when no one was looking, he was able to show a face of true love. This reminds me of my father because he is strict and all but in the end, I know that he truly cares about me. He's the type of father that would light a match just to see if i was sleeping alright.
The poem "My Papa's Waltz" reminds me of the relationship I have with my father because he would often do small things like this that would show his love. My dad had always tucked me into bed when I was with him. We played and "romped" often and had a lot of fun, making messes which often upset my mother but neither of us had cared. The line "such waltzing was not easy" you could more metaphorical sense and I did. My relationship with my father is one that is far from easy and perfect and it takes effort to hold on to, however in the end it all comes together in a dance.
ReplyDelete"First Lesson" is exactly how I feel but towards my mom, not my dad. This poem talk about how she admires her dad and why he does the things he does. I admire my mom so much and the choices she makes for me and my brother might seem harsh sometimes, but I know she does it because she wants to protect me. "Mother to Son" also reminded me about my mom because in this poem the mom is telling her son to never give up and always push forward and my mom tells me that all the time when I talk to her about my problems.
ReplyDelete"Those Winter Sundays" is the opposite of me and my mother. In this poem, the son never thanks his dad for all that he does for him because he didn't see it then. I always thank my mom and tell her how much I appreciate everything she does for me and my brother. I know that I never have to feel the guilt of not thanking my mom and not telling her that I love her because I tell her everyday.
The relationship between my parents and myself is one that can be somewhat shown through the poems, "Taught Me Purple, and "Those Winter Sundays." My parents have had to work hard for everything that they get because neither of them have a very well paying job, my dad is a post office truck driver and my mom is a lunch lady. They have taught me about how great life could be and the color "purple" but have never actually lived it ("Taught Me Purple"). My father's hard working personality also was reminded to me a lot when I read "Those Winter Sundays." He works, leaving the house at 9am and coming home at 9:30am typically 6 days a week to support our large family of six. My dad does often work "Sunday's too" and I need to thank more for doing that and giving me all the opportunity that he can afford to give ("Those Winter Sundays"). My parents are hard workers and these poems have shown me to be more thankful towards them.
ReplyDeleteMy Papa’s Waltz shows a very complex situation between a father and a son which it is geared towards a very specific audience. The poem mentions how "The whisky on your breath, could make a small boy dizzy; But I hung on like death”. This implies that the father, although may have suffered from alcoholism, the son still stayed loyal to his father. This is different from my personal situation because I do not have a strong “like death” relationship,or that inevitable father-daughter bond. Within this poem, it explains how although his father is a rough man, meaning he does drink and works hard, yet still has his child looking up to him and being a role model. It goes to show that you can have a rough exterior, yet still be a good parent.
ReplyDeleteIn the poem, Taught Me Purple it explains how in a single mother situation, she wants to show her children how beautiful the world can be outside this little world. This is similar to my life in the way that my mom has always showed me the natural beauty of the world. My mother always made sure that we were active outside, and she “reached for beauty” much like the mother in the poem. The relationship also seemed very strong between the mother and her children, which is like how I am with my own. Overall, in both my personal relationship with my parents and the one the children have with their parent in the poem, are very similar. My parents want to show me what the world has to offer, not just what the current living situation is now.
The Mother to Son poem reminds me how my parents have had to fight and work hard to be where they are today. My mother came from Canada and had to learn English and still go to school like every other American child. The poem explains how his mother had never climbed "crystal stairs" and how she has always been "climbin" and "turnin corners" always an uphill battle which that was how it was for my mother. The First Lesson reminds me of my dad and how he tries and scares all the boys away and say I will not be able to have a boyfriend until I am 40. The poem My papa's waltz reminds me of when me and my father would dance together at family gatherings and I would stand on his toes as we danced across the dance floor with other fathers and daughters. What makes me think of my father the most is in the poem the boy describes his fathers palm[s]caked hard by dirt which describes my father fully. He works hard and long hours outside on bridges. This is what the man in the poem seems to do work hard and care about his son just like my father does.
ReplyDeleteI could relate the relationship that my father and I have to the poem "Those Winter Sundays" by Robert Hayden.My father has done so many things for me in my life time and I am very appreciative of that. Within the poem it talks about how the father " polished my good shoes as well" and this reminded me of my father because he goes out of his way to do things for me. The purpose of the poem was to show somewhat the guilt that person had about not thanking their father and I feel the same way. I should really thank my father for all that he does for me. I can contrast one aspect of this poem to my life when it states " No one ever thanked him". With my father being in the military many people thank him on a daily basis, so really his efforts do not go unnoticed in the public.
ReplyDeleteThe complexity of My Papa's Waltz can be interpreted in loose terms to signify that deep bond that he has for his father. He accepts his father even if he drinks (maybe too much) after a hard day of labor. That is the kind of bond that is impossible to break. I do not share that kind of bond with my father. Whether it is me being stubborn or my dad not understanding me. He does not like being wrong so this can often cause conflict between us. We always seem to butting heads on most topics and discussions.
ReplyDeleteMy first response focused more on how my dad is the family communicator of the group and that our relationship is on and off sometimes except when I read the poems more I realized another big part of our relationship is that I might not appreciate my dad as much as I should. In the poem “Those Winter Sundays” By Robert Hayden the purpose of the poem was for the boy to show how much he appreciated his dad because he never showed it to him because he was unaware. The little boy “Speaking indifferently to him” made me think of how I sometimes talk to my dad like that. He always took for granted him bringing in the wood and keep the house warm and one line that can relate to both my situation and the poem is “What did I know, what did I know”, referring to what little we knew about how much our parents do for us.
ReplyDeleteMy first response about my parents was talking about how the relationship between us was strong. I think the poem The Secret Heart was kind of like what I wrote about. The poem was about the love the father had for his son, yet he could not figure out how to show it. I think my parents definitely know how to show their love for me but they show it in some of the same ways as the father in this poem. When the poem says "The man had struck a match to see if his son slept peacefully", I remember being a little kid and waking up sometimes by the sound of my parents checking on me before they went to bed. I think that the relationship in the poem and my relationship with my parents is somewhat the same but also different. The caring is the same, but the relationship is very different.
ReplyDeleteThe poem The First Lesson was a good description of my dad because he is always trying to teach me things and mold me to be a good person without too much of a push. The first lesson is a poem about a dad and a daughter relationship which is close but not overpowering her and hovering. He teaches her things like what to stay away from danger or teach her to be aware of a boys intentions. This dad just seems to be looking out for his little girl and wants to be there for her. This describes my dad because he is passively trying to make me into a better person every day.
ReplyDeleteEven though I didn't write about it in my relationship with my mom. The poem titled "Mother to Son" is the closest to my relationship with my mom. The poem talks about how the mom is warning her son about life and that it isn't perfect. My mom always is constantly doing this to me. It feels like every time I complain that's her answer is that life isn't perfect. This is what usually makes up our friendly arguments is her saying it isn't perfect and me going back at her telling her I'm going to make mine perfect. All of the others don't really relate to my writing except for this one so this was the one that caught my eye when reviewing.
ReplyDeleteThe poem "First Lesson" reminds me of my father almost perfectly. I grew up Daddy's little girl and nowadays it seems that he, as the father in the poem, seems to be full of worry and "mistrusts" many of new interactions. Much like when it says that the father is afraid of change. My father has always put me first and he's always felt capable of giving me the world. Since I've grown up I feel like sometimes he hasn't realized that I've become more independent and I make my own choices and that I'm not his perfect little girl anymore. It's important that as his daughter, that I remember he's not out to ruin my life, but that he's trying to keep me from climbing and falling. I've got to meet a few caterpillars before I can meet the butterfly.
ReplyDeleteThe poem "First Lesson" reminds me of my father almost perfectly. I grew up Daddy's little girl and nowadays it seems that he, as the father in the poem, seems to be full of worry and "mistrusts" many of new interactions. Much like when it says that the father is afraid of change. My father has always put me first and he's always felt capable of giving me the world. Since I've grown up I feel like sometimes he hasn't realized that I've become more independent and I make my own choices and that I'm not his perfect little girl anymore. It's important that as his daughter, that I remember he's not out to ruin my life, but that he's trying to keep me from climbing and falling. I've got to meet a few caterpillars before I can meet the butterfly.
ReplyDeleteI like the poem "those winter Sundays" because I think that is shows how much we teenagers under appreciate our parents. They are responsible for our entire existence, including heat, food, education and life. They get us to and from anywhere we need to go, and sacrifice countless hours of their time for our benefit. This relates to my relationship with my parents, unfortunately, but I think its just a part of what teenagers are.
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